Double Page Spread Drafts

Eight Draft of Double Page Spread
Final Draft

After a lot of feedback from my teacher, I came to the conclusion that my final product was not up to the standard needed for my genre of music. Therefore I went back into photo shop and publisher and created a new DPS with a new image and a new look. I am pleased with the final product as it is more sophisticated and relates to my genre.

Seventh Draft of Double Page Spread

I edited my final draft to have more text to make it more conventional. I also made my pull quotes within the article bigger to fill the space.

Sixth Draft of Double Page Spread After Feedback

I took on board the feedback from teachers and peers and made adjustments to my double page spread by adding another pull quote but as I did this I lost text and felt it was to spaced out. I edited my image as it was unconventional and looked as if my model was floating in mid air. I chose to put a border round my pull quote on the left hand side to make it stand out more to the reader. I also added Q's and A's to my double page spread to make it clear what type of interview the article is.

Fifth Draft of Double Page Spread

For my fifth draft  I made the introduction paragraph of my article bold as it gives an insight into the artist and  her background this makes it stand out to the rest of the text which is conventional of top music magazines.

Fourth Draft

My fourth draft I kept the same as my third draft as I liked the layout and thought it attracted attention but I added page numbers to the bottom to make it more conventional and to make it look realistic and professional. 

Third Draft

In my third draft of my DPS I made the text smaller and pulled it down so that I could fit in a header of Nadines name so that it stood out to the reader and this gave them a clear understanding of who the article is about. I also added another quote to use on the left hand side which looks like it has come from a newspaper.

Second Draft of DPS

In my second draft I added a pull quote to the text to make the text more conventional and including a pull quote attracts readers as it is a short story of the answer within the article. Again I needed to add more to the Double Page Spread to make it stand out and be more conventional.

 First Draft of DPS

My first draft looked very plain and wasn't very conventional to a music magazine it needed page numbers adding on to it so that it connected with the contents page. I also needed more about the main artists as from this the reader wouldn't know who this artist is at first glance.

Feedback off Adam Johnson

good - very filled and grabs my attention immediately,
- good use of photoshop
Bad - needs more articles it could have more detail.

Feedback:

The layout is amazing, and goes really well with everything on the page - it doesn't look cluttered or messy. The bottom image's quote could have been made a bit bigger, or a bit bolder to make the reader more interested in the article - as well as making it more eye catching.
As well as the above, adding a previous magazine cover onto the contents page is also a good idea, very creative. Maybe next time try adding an editors letter? Or maybe a competition.

Feedback Actions

To improve my contents page I am going to...

• Add another column on to my contents page which is probably a monthly column as my magazine is a monthly subscription and then the reader can see the limited articles they can see that month
• I am going to improve my page numbers and make this more bold and make sure they are stood out especially on the images.
• I am going to make my images and smaller so I can write a bit about them to let the readers know what article the images are from.

This image shows me in the midst of the making changes process to improve my contents page.

This is my improved Contents Page that I have reproduced from my class and teacher feedback.

Contents Page - Teacher Feedback

Contents Page Drafts and Final Draft

Draft One

This is my first draft of my contents page. I used pictures in there normal colours which I felt was too simple. I also forgot to add a page number to this draft and I didn't like the layout I had used making it look unprofessional.

Draft Two

This is my second draft that I started from scratch which was a completely different idea to my first draft. This contents page had more colour with boxes and bugger images. The font I used on this draft let it down as it was uneasy to read and this wouldn't attract the reader.

 Draft Three

On my third draft I then went back on to using my first original idea and started moving the images and font around. As you can see I have left the masthead as it is I think this is appropriate for my contents page. Again I forgot a page number and felt it was again too simple and plain with spaces that needed filling. I changed the font back to the original I used in my first draft as it was easier to read.

Fourth Draft 

For my fourth draft I made the pictures bigger to fill the contents page and also take inspiration from top of the pops by adding in the front cover image to further advertise but it also reinforces that the continuity of who the main article within the magazine is about. 

Fifth Draft 

This is my fifth draft for my contents page. After taking into consideration my teachers feedback and using the advice she gave me I went back and improved my Contents Page by adding another column and  more articles as well as clear writing against the pictures.

Sixth Draft

On my Sixth and final Draft I added just the date of  my magazine at the bottom as this will consist throughout as the page numbers change and then I took inspiration from the Q magazine I analysed and added a heading of 'cover story' to further reinforce the article and promote it more than the other articles.

Peer Assessment - My Feedback

I am happy with the comments on my blog and have been told to add a few more bits to my blog to show more of my research and development of my front cover which I am going to add to boost up the posts and show what I have done. I need to tidy up my blog a bit but need to look into changing the shape and size of my posts. But over all I am happy with my current feedback and will try to improve this over next few days and week.

Feedback Adam Johnson Peer Assessment

Overall I like the content of your blog it has a lot of detail. I would recommend you use more posts and better organisation.

Good;
- I like the abstractness of it
Bad
- squashed text and a bit too dark

Peer assessment from Brandon Dodsworth

The planning and preparation for the music magazine has been carried out in great detail, using a lot of market research and research on existing magazines of the genre you have chosen, which I really like. I really like the colour scheme on the front cover final draft, the red makes everything stand out and would definitely catch the target audiences eye, enticing them to buy your magazine.

Apart from all of the things I like about your blog, there aren't many posts. If you could add some extra posts on your use of photoshop and design of the magazine I think it would make your blog that little bit better.

Sabrina Vizor: overall the blog is well layed out and out and is very clear however small adjustments to make certain things stand out might be needed. for example making some pictures bigger and perhaps showing how your came to end front cover like photo shoots. I like the prezi's and you have good description of why you have done things. To improve i would just add as much as you can and all your past work to show your progress.
Strengths of front cover: Good colour scheme and impressive makeup. You obviously have taken the style of your magazine in to consideration and this shows. Clear fonts and good cover stories.
Areas of development: a lot of empty spaces and in some places messy i would just tidy it up a bout for example having the barcode along the bottom may look neater? I like the red faded background but i would see if anything else looks better like plane white so its not overly red also her dress is pink why not try it in pink?